Friday, October 5, 2012

{Tears} a five Sentence Fiction Prompt

Lillie McFerrin

 Her memory sparked as the various sounds enveloped her mind, the crashing of the waterfall, the splatter of raindrops through the treetop canopy. Her own tears dripping one by one upon her dress.

Although she could picture each of them in vivid array she could no longer hear the individual sound of each. Inside they were but a muted rushing roaring through her slowly dulling senses.

Turning her face upward, she felt the raindrops mingle and entwine with her own salt filled teardrops; slowly cleansing the pain within.

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8 comments:

Honoré said...

So beautiful, can hear the rain drops, and see the tears :)

Jazzbumpa said...

Very sad and moving. You put us right there with her.

I suppose the dress is ruined, too.

JzB

Brian said...

Great sensory details in this one, especially sound, with the splashing and muted rushing. We don't know what's causing the pain, but the sense of relief is still really strong. Nice work!

Josie Two Shoes said...

So often our souls blend in harmony with nature, raindrops, teardrops, and a waterfall of sadness washing pain away. Beautifully descriptive!

mjshorts said...

Beautifully moving piece of writing.
The image of the mingling of her own tears & the rain cleansing her was very powerful.

Sarah said...

Love this Car - beautifully written.

lorrainefort said...

I know this sensation too well. very well written.

Lisa Shambrook said...

I love this...and haven't we all been there at some point? Letting the tears fall until there are no more to let go...