Tuesday, September 17, 2013

{trifecta} Rainbow

[from the impossibility of reaching the rainbow, at whose foot a pot of gold is said to be buried] :  an illusory goal or hope

Pennies rattled deep in her skirt pocket as she hurried toward the town car that was waiting to take her away. Her stomach heaved as the butterflies danced within. She had waited six weeks for this day to arrive, long days and nights of work had left her exhausted. Though she was weary, the thought of returning to the hospital had returned the spring to her step.

Grey skies darkened the landscape, hanging suspended over the mountainous ranges. Misty rain lingered after the previous evenings thunder storm. She pulled her cardigan around her against the chilly gloom of the air as he opened the back door for her.

“It will be a long and slow trip to town today” the driver said as she sank into the wide seat of the car.

She merely smiled at him as he closed her door. The engine of the car ticked over, emitting a gentle growl and a gust of black smoke. The car idled for a few moments, warming against the outside temperature. He slowly eased the hand brake off and they bumped slowly down the cobbled road, toward the open road.

Their combined breath fogged up the interior windows and she raised her free hand to slowly wipe away the steam.

Patches of cerulean sky flickered into vision as they left the mountain ranges behind and a lone rainbow appeared shimmering against the cloudy backdrop. Its tail resting along the road they travelled. Growing in size as they drew near it felt possible they could drive right through. The car chased the rainbows’ tail for many miles; it constantly glazed and glimmered into thin air, appearing again further in the distance.

She wondered if today would be the day. Her every waking thought of the past six weeks tied up in this moment and at the foot of that rainbow.

Perhaps today she might finally be allowed to bring her little girl home.


{322 words}
I found this prompt via the Trifecta Blog (via a Twitter link)
It seems I am some weeks late to join in, but better late than never!  The rules of the challenge are set out here - and I think I managed to cover them all, even though I have used a piece that may potentially be used in my novel.

Constructive Criticism welcome.   


LittleWhiteDove said...

love it!

JannaTWrites said...

I wondered why she was happy to go back to the hospital. The last line explains it all! I hope today is the day for her, too!

P.S. Welcome to Trifecta!

Anonymous said...

The last line was a pleasant surprise. Evocative piece.

Draug said...

Great piece! And don't worry--peeps can come and go to Trifecta anytime!

Trifecta said...

Love how you keep your reader guessing right to the end. Lovely story.
Thanks for linking up!

kymm said...

You can feel the trepidation here, as well as the hope. Nice.

Pratibha said...

Well done, indeed!

Atreyee said...

What a sweet ending-loved the suspense:-)