Sunday, July 29, 2012

{Perserverance} Five Sentence Fiction Prompt

Lillie McFerrin
 The soft squeak of his sneakers, filtered after him as the doctor walked away.
She sat still, body numbed by the sad and dreadful news he had delivered.
A frightening new treatment regime for her little girl, an unknown entity to battle a mysterious disease.   
Gathering her resolve, she stood slowly and as her shaking subsided, she stalked back toward the ward.
This was but another hurdle in their journey together and together they would fight.
Linking up with Lillie McFerrin this week. It's been a long time since I've joined in on Five Sentence Fiction and I'm trying to get into a routine of joining in each week. This piece is part of the big story I'm trying to write (it feels weird to refer to it as a Novel just yet ;)   
Constructive Criticism welcomed.  


JTsuruoka said...

This is an inspiring read. There is courage in these sentences as well as perseverance.

LittleWhiteDove said...

Nice job Car! Love it :)

Sandra Crook said...

A very strong piece that parents will identify with. Nice one.

Anonymous said...

Love this! Uplifting, simple, and poignant all at the same time.

Unknown said...

Very inspiring and the strength shown in the mother is amazing but what choice does she have? Beautifully written piece. xx

Claire said...

Your character shows incredible strength, and I love how personal each word felt. all in all, a very inspiring piece of writing!

Lisa Shambrook said...

A strong piece, which resonates with a fear every parent has, but would fight like a soldier against every time!