Wednesday, August 22, 2012

{Depth} Visual Dare #19 prompt

He stood on the edge of the precipice. Balancing his weight effortlessly as he gazed unseeing into the depths below him.

One step.

The world had changed, it was as though he had blinked and missed a decade of life.

His life.

Closing his eyes in the moment, he felt stuck in a weird time warp. Happier times. No war scars. No alcohol. A family.

Life seemed stagnant. He could neither go forward. Nor return.

A broken man he stood and stared. Raising his arm, he heaved with a strength he didn’t know he had. He watched as the bottle smashed against a rock. Leaving a wet patch, before a shower of glass rained down into the gully below.

Tears ran down his face as he turned and walked away.

Linking up with Angela and Visual Dare again this week. The prompt this week was "depth" (see the photograph on the original blog post.) As my character stood on the edge of this cliff face his story really could have gone either way. After much deliberation, I have chosen to give my character a slightly brighter path (this week) I have been REALLY struggling to write about his difficulties.  


Lisa Shambrook said...

That was so good Car, thought he might have jumped, but loved the shower of glass instead!

Laura (@lejamez) said...

Was so convinced he was going to take a tumble, but glad he just threw the bottle, great imagery :)

Angie Richmond said...

Totally thought he was going to jump! Great twist :)

Angela said...

Great work!! I thought we were on a suicide trajectory too - which made the bottle smashing at the end that much stronger, and more profound. He's a man desperate enough to change, but not to give in. LOVE.

Great job! Thank you for another great Visual Dare!

Sarah said...

Stunning piece of writing, I could really feel the pain of the character. Well done!